Priscilla Pineda
English 6A Professor Lennon
February 20, 2010
Valentine’s Day
Valentine’s Day is a holiday that is celebrated around the world. Valentine is a holiday that is supposed to be celebrated with your loved ones and to share the love you have with one another. Although I do not celebrate Valentine’s Day due to my religion, I spent the day with my family in which started joyful and ended in a tragic day.
Family is the most important thing that matters to me, because they are the ones who are there for you, spend Valentine’s Day with my family is the best thing I could ask for. My Valentines morning my family I went to breakfast, as we usually do every Sunday morning. We spent half of our morning in the restaurant catching up on everyone life since we all have hectic schedules.
After breakfast we usually go to the movies and see the latest film. Unfortunately as we were leaving the restaurant on our way to the theaters my mother receives an unexpected call from her aunt in El Salvador. Her aunt mention to her that her great grandmother who is ninety-one years old was ill and that it was necessary for her to visit her grandmother before she passed away. My mother at that moment brought the first flight out to El Salvador.
Once we arrived to the airport my mother told us sorry if this trip had ruined our family day but it was urgent for her to leave in order for her to say goodbye to her grandmother before she passed away. My family and I told her she had nothing to apologize about as long as she went to see her grandmother we were happy she was going to see her and we were sad at the same time that she was passing away. Valentine’s Day is a day that is supposed to be filled of joy of happiness and love in my cases it was not at all filled of joy and happiness but it was a tragic day I will never forget.
This esssay was well written. She explains how her family does not celebrate Valentine's Day and what she did instead. It was sad to hear that after all the fun they were having as a family, someone called with bad news. It was good that she shared this for others to see. Her essay had good descriptions and that is what caught my attention as a reader.
ReplyDeleteThis essay is really descriptive in which brought the reader to see the writer's pain. Would suggest that the writer re-reads her paper and makes sure to not make long sentences. She can the long sentence into two. Other than that she has done a pretty good job. Although her Valetnines was tragic she was able to spend time with her family.
ReplyDeleteThis essay is well writen. You were able to give the reader details and i as the reader was able to feel what you were feeling. Overall keep up he good work. Try to revise your essay to catch any Gramar errors.
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